: Not bad at all! The Lucian-Thresh rivalry is definitely one of the most epic amongst the ones we have, and your piece pays fine homage to both characters! Naming Senna and Lucian's two guns 'Light and Shadow' ... Since they're both purifiers, initially I thought that to be a bit sketchy, and I would have put forward alternatives like 'Dawn and Dusk', 'Grace and Mercy', 'Sky and Earth' ... But calling his weapon 'Shadow' fits nicely enough - after losing Senna, Lucian has truly abandoned the 'path of light' he used to walk with her, and in his grief and vengeance has become a 'shadow' of his former self - now, he comes toward Thresh not as a paragon, but as a human who has come to terms with both aspects of who he is. Not entirely sure how you'd fit this in the canon however (doesn't really strike me as a 'finale'). Did you consider writing about their _first_ encounter, where Thresh decieves them, captures Senna then shows what a d*ck he is? Filling in a gap like that, where you can flesh out Senna and go through Lucian's change of heart; in my opinion, that would have had far more potential for you to take it to the next level. Well done! ^_^
> [{quoted}](name=AdcStoleMyAs5ist,realm=OCE,application-id=wJE2nAgV,discussion-id=ju6gEExN,comment-id=0002,timestamp=2016-07-13T08:59:09.861+0000) > > Not bad at all! The Lucian-Thresh rivalry is definitely one of the most epic amongst the ones we have, and your piece pays fine homage to both characters! > > Naming Senna and Lucian's two guns 'Light and Shadow' ... Since they're both purifiers, initially I thought that to be a bit sketchy, and I would have put forward alternatives like 'Dawn and Dusk', 'Grace and Mercy', 'Sky and Earth' ... > > But calling his weapon 'Shadow' fits nicely enough - after losing Senna, Lucian has truly abandoned the 'path of light' he used to walk with her, and in his grief and vengeance has become a 'shadow' of his former self - now, he comes toward Thresh not as a paragon, but as a human who has come to terms with both aspects of who he is. > > Not entirely sure how you'd fit this in the canon however (doesn't really strike me as a 'finale'). Did you consider writing about their _first_ encounter, where Thresh decieves them, captures Senna then shows what a d*ck he is? Filling in a gap like that, where you can flesh out Senna and go through Lucian's change of heart; in my opinion, that would have had far more potential for you to take it to the next level. > > Well done! ^_^ Thank you very much for your comment, I appreciate your kind words :) just to answer your question regarding the naming of Light & Shadow, upon release the concept art showed Lucian's guns with L & S engraved on them. People speculated that it was light & shadow and that's what his abilities were based upon, but we know now that it was named for Lucian & Senna. In all honesty I'd love to write an entire book length about the famous Thresh/Lucian rivalry, but unfortunately word constraints. But again I thank you for your kind comments, they are very appreciated :)
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: Very atmospheric! Love love love the ending. Super dramatic XD Kinda wish they get a happy ending, but hey this works too.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your kind comments. It's not the real ending though, I just didn't want to go over the word limit ;) who's to say what happens next :) but again thank you for your comment, made my day!
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